Post by Ian Austin on Sept 3, 2013 17:26:28 GMT
Finished 1.01!
I kinda liked it, dude. I know that seems like a backhanded compliment, but the truth is 'kinda liked' sums up my feelings aptly. There's some really great stuff in there: like having the fallout shelters taken out immediately, and a brilliant amount of gore (I'm a gorehead)... and yet at the same time, the tone at points falls into unintentional comedy. Lots of people saying 'oh my God' and 'Jesus Christ' to the point where it feels like a running joke. Which isn't bad per se, it just doesn't feel entirely intentional. The plus side is that this moves at a whip-fast pace (something that's difficult for any writer), the characters are set up quickly (although they'd a tad 'stock' at the moment) and you don't do that 'what are we dealing with?' rubbish; instead, like Romero, trusting that the reader doesn't need their hand-held.
It does seem like it relies on fond memories of Romero's films and the Resident Evil series (the script, and this is a compliment, is very Resident Evil like) a tad too much, but that's not really a problem: take from the best, throw in your own touches, and have at it.
So yeah... I'll definitely pick this up again. I don't think it's hit the ground at 88mph, but I think you've done a pretty good job of starting something that, as the tension rises and characters meet, will get progressively better as your experience level rises. And the 'postgame' stuff is brilliant, by the way. Extremely clever idea. I'd suggest a page break after 'the end' to allow a breather between the episode finishing and that beginning. That said, looking forward to the second episode.
C+
I kinda liked it, dude. I know that seems like a backhanded compliment, but the truth is 'kinda liked' sums up my feelings aptly. There's some really great stuff in there: like having the fallout shelters taken out immediately, and a brilliant amount of gore (I'm a gorehead)... and yet at the same time, the tone at points falls into unintentional comedy. Lots of people saying 'oh my God' and 'Jesus Christ' to the point where it feels like a running joke. Which isn't bad per se, it just doesn't feel entirely intentional. The plus side is that this moves at a whip-fast pace (something that's difficult for any writer), the characters are set up quickly (although they'd a tad 'stock' at the moment) and you don't do that 'what are we dealing with?' rubbish; instead, like Romero, trusting that the reader doesn't need their hand-held.
It does seem like it relies on fond memories of Romero's films and the Resident Evil series (the script, and this is a compliment, is very Resident Evil like) a tad too much, but that's not really a problem: take from the best, throw in your own touches, and have at it.
So yeah... I'll definitely pick this up again. I don't think it's hit the ground at 88mph, but I think you've done a pretty good job of starting something that, as the tension rises and characters meet, will get progressively better as your experience level rises. And the 'postgame' stuff is brilliant, by the way. Extremely clever idea. I'd suggest a page break after 'the end' to allow a breather between the episode finishing and that beginning. That said, looking forward to the second episode.
C+